breath sense feel

8 years ago #9619710          

Beautiful composition! One minor edit suggested, though - "breath" is the noun form, "breathe" is the verb which matches "sense" and "feel" as verbs.

8 years ago #9620230          

@BethMit
you're probably right, but it's also possible that all three words are meant to be nouns.

8 years ago #9621365          

@FinnMacCool Feel isn't a noun though. If they were nouns it should be either "breath sense feeling" or "breath sensation feeling".

8 years ago #9621545          

@drperkele
"feel" can be a noun.
but as i said, @BethMit is probably right.

8 years ago #9630414          

@FinnMacCool Yes, but it doesn't particularly work in this context. Either way, I agree with you =)

8 years ago #9620652          

True, that occurred to me too. If that were the case, "Breath - Sense - Feeling" would be nouns. (Having "the feels" is a nouning [related to verbing?], but I've only seen it in the plural form.)

8 years ago #9620567          

Wow, beautiful!